Fanfic: Rest of the Sith Empire

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Fan-fic: Rest of the Sith Empire

FIRST PART:

Mayala was a twi'lek, a smugler. Her wookiee friend, Malon, folowed her everywhere. Everybody thinked that she saved his life, and now, he is paying a llife debt. But that wasn't true. She was the one who was paying the life debt to a wookiee. He saved her when she was smugling some spice on Kassykk. On Kassykk there was a law which tells that every cought smugler needs to be terminated. She was coughted. Luckly, when gourds came to arrest her, he was near with his plasma canon and wookie bowcaster in other hand. He was a smugler too. When they came near them, he shot them both in a half of second. Mayala was so gratefull to him that she promised him that she would go everywhere with him.

Now, they were on Curscant, waiting for some job. Sudenly some old man, from some unknown specis came to them. He talked about some forgoten planet, the Sith Empire, lost in the space... Mayala didn't get it very good, but understand that old man needs a ride to the planet Comban, where, as he tells, is a long forgoten Sith Empire. The problem was that the planet Comban was erased from all hyperspace maps. When the old man said that he has got cordinats, some gangsters showed up. They were bounty hounters searching for Mayala and Malon. Mayla tried to shot but they were allredy dead. Old man has killed them with his lightsaber. Mayala asked him is he a Jedi, and he said that he was a Jedi before they trick him, and he didn't want to talk more about it. She asked him why is he searching for the Sith Empire, he answerd that he wants to join them.





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FANFIC: REST OF THE SITH EMPIRE

SECOND PART.

'You want to join them!' Mayala shout. 'They are nothing but murderers!! And I even don't know your name!'Ok then, maybe I could tell you... I am Naklo'n M'nekon' He said. 'Naklo'n M'nekon? You mean that Naklo'n M'nekon?' 'Yes!' he answerd. 'But you should be dead! You are' 'thousand years old' he said. 'Why do you want to join them?' 'Well, I dont, I want to find my lost aprentice, twi'lek named Nalaya' 'Nayala was a name of my sister, could it be posible that you are searching for Nalaya Mantfinder?' 'Yes, that is her' Naklo'n said.

'Then I must go with you! But wee need some more people with us, come on, let's go to my ship'

They have go to the Nar Shada to find some people who could help them.

Mayala came to the dueling club to find some soldiers, Malon gone to the bar to find a few more pilots, and Naklo'n came to visit some old Jedi friends. Mayala just enter into the club when some loud voice shouted:' And he won again, the unbelivible Nalion!!!!!'

'This one should be want I am looking for!' She thinked.

When he came out to write autographs, she pulled him out from all those people and ask him quickly ' Do you want to be a mercenary for me, I pay much! He thinked a little bit and say 'only if you have a good lunch menu' He laughed and came with her.

He was tall, had some strange red-purple hair, and no jacket. His blaster was at his belt and he looked young.

He said that he needs to go to his apartment and then he will came to her. Mayala said him that he should go to the lounch bay 453 and then he left.

Mayala came back to ship where Malon was waitnig with another wookiee and some man who looked like human. Naklo'n waited with an old women, also a Jedi and her padawan.

Mayala find out that women's name Leina, and her padawan's, which was a human boy, Lune.

Wookiee's name was Ralontik, and a strange man's, Natalmink.

They waited for a few minutes and then came Nalion. They decited that they should go to the Bespin where were also some Naklo'ns friends.

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very interesting.ajde još!

Citiram: Napisao Orion 16 siječnja 2004

Ima potencijala... samo riješi gramatičke greške.

Riješit će se to kad prevede na hrvatski.

Požuri s tim nastavkom.

A kaj bi ti reko sam u nedjelju!

Sori, nisam vidio.

uskoro¨!

Sorry ali ne stignem Valjda ce sutra...

dobro biti ćemo strpljivi!

Evo, kada toga nema onda crtez Naliona

ostadoh bez riječi

I Kassykk se pise Kashyyyk

Da, nisam bio siguran, a ionako sam to nabrzinu piso, danas ide na hrvatskom, i treci nastavak

good.

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